Monday, 18 March 2013

Monday Morning Writing

Today for writing we looked at the cameo 'Monday Morning'  and talked about the descriptive parts of the text. We all had a go at writing our own piece of writing about 'Monday Morning', remembering to write it like the cameo. Tomorrow we will deconstruct the cameo further and discuss how we can make this more descriptive. We will then try to do this to our pieces of writing for 'Monday Morning'. 

Monday Morning (cameo)

Mum woke me up really early and I didn't want to get up.
It was foggy.
It was quiet except for dad.
He was making a noise in the kitchen.
After I said goodbye, we walked to the bus shelter.
When we got there, the fog was going away.
The bus came. 

Here are a few examples from Room 3     

Monday Morning - By Alexandra Hassall


My niece woke me up with pillow.
I  could hear  the coffee mochine  boiling as the steam puffs out.  
I brush my teeth, my niece is brushing her teeth too.
I'm going to school.
The big clouds look like they were going to burst.


Monday Morning - By Mason

My alarm clock woke me up.
It was cloudy this morning.
I hear my brother screaming and my mum making breakfast.
I get my drink bottle, lunch box and I drive to school.
It was cloudy.
I'm walking into school and going to my class.


Monday Morning - By Emma

My sister woke me up really early this morning but I didn't want to get up.
It was very dark and rainy.
It was very quiet except for the kettle.
It was boiling hot water for mum and dads drinks'.
After I said goodbye, I made my lunch.
Then I packed my bag and walked to the garage.
We drove the car to school.
When I got to school it was still very cloudy.


Monday Morning - By Riley

My mum tapped me to wake me up.
The weather was very cloudy.
When I woke I heard my cat scratching ont he cat door because she wanted to go outside.
I got dressed in my school uniform and packed my bag.
My mum drove me to school.








2 comments:

  1. Room 3, you are becoming wonderful poets. Love from Mrs Bennett.

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  2. I'm really impressed with the way you have looked at the very powerful writing of an author and used the techniques in your own writing.
    Mrs Holley

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